海淀一模作文太难写,参考答案没法用,这位高手再写范文

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这届“生于非典、考于新冠”的高三学生太难了!

五一假期刚过,北京市海淀区高三正式开学才两周,举行了高考前很关键的第一次模拟考试,简称一模。这次命题命出了新水准,考生考出了新郁闷。

当孩子们拿到英语考试题的时候,看到两篇作文题时,很多都傻眼了。

第一篇要求写登月这样的高端大气上档次的话题,并且要提到“月亮在中国文化中的寓意”。月亮的寓意?这挑战有点过大了。疫情都把人关傻了。关于月的传统诗文太多太多,随便就背出一打:

“举杯邀明月,对饮成三人”,

“月有阴晴圆缺,人有悲欢离合”,

“今人不见古时月,今月曾经照古人”,

“海上生明月,天涯共此时”,

“月落乌啼霜满天,江枫渔火对愁眠”,

“愿我如星君如月,夜夜流光相皎洁”,

“大漠沙如雪,燕山月似钩”,

“无言独上西楼,月如钩。寂寞梧桐深院锁清秋”,

“人有悲欢离合,月有阴晴圆缺,此事古难全”,

“我歌月徘徊,我舞影零乱”,

“秦楼月,年年柳色,灞陵伤别”,

“双星何事今宵会,遗我庭前月一钩”。

命题的大官人,您说说,这寓意,您是要我们用哪个呀?

第二篇虽然是高考志愿填报这么熟悉的话题,但是很多高三菜鸟平时完全没记“专业”这个词居然是major,考场应急,最后搬出class和course的比比皆是。

最要命的是其中的3图含糊不清,不仅“时代担当”这样一个政治宣传话语没有给出翻译,连图片里到底画的是医护还是消防员还是军人,谁心里都犯嘀咕。

其中,“新闻联播”这么高大上的节目名称,没有官方钦定版本,谁也不敢随便翻译。

当高三英语老师这次也特别惨,应为官方提供的参考答案,居然很不好用。这两天正在讲评试卷啊,这样的范文只能悄没声地发了。

邱老师来了,写作教学大咖随手就写了新范文,希望能帮到大家。

好了,先看看题,一并看看官方的“参考答案”。

第三部分:书面表达(共两节,35分)

第一节(15分)

假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你的美国朋友Jim得知你对探月感兴趣,发来邮件和你 讨论该话题。请你给他回复邮件,内容包括:

1.    月亮在中国文化中的寓意;

2.     你对人类探月活动的看法。

注意:1.词数不少于50

2.开头和结尾已给出,不计入总词数。

提示词:探月 moon exploration

Dear Jim,


Yours,

Li Hua


One possible version:

I am glad to share with you more details about my passion for moon exploration.

It started with what I had been told about the moon as a kid and grew stronger with time. As you can guess, there is rich cultural meaning behind the faithful companion of the earth. In Chinese culture, as opposed to the masculinity of the sun, the moon is often compared to a quiet and elegant lady. Also, it reminds people of their family and friends far away. People feel reassured knowing that they are watching the same moon as if the moon could serve as their messenger.

Human beings have never stopped exploring our closest neighbor. I believe it is of great significance. The development of relevant technology facilitates the progress of science in general, which benefits our everyday life. What’s more, I think moon exploration shows an important human trait, that is, curiosity about the unknown, which is the driving force that has brought our species this far.

I hope you find what I‘ve mentioned above interesting and reasonable. By the way, what do you think of when you gaze at the moon? Write back and tell me about it!


邱老师版范文

Learning from your last letter that you also take keen interest in China’s exploration onto the moon,I am extremely delighted to have an extensive discussion with you.

The moon,known as Jade Rabbit,chang'e and some other meaningful objects in Chinese culture,symbolizes beauty,reunions and peace to the Chinese people.It has been vividly described in the poetry by famous poets since ancient times, which remind us of our motherland,family members and our relatives.Aso,ancient Chinese people used its shapes to predict the weather and the dates.Indeed,the moon has great influence on Chinese literature and the development of science.

When it comes to the moon exploration program, it is undoubtedly significant to the human being.With increasing man-made satellites and manned spaceship having been launched onto the moon,we know more about it and acquire accurate information we need to further research it.Besides,Not only does the moon exploration enhance our determination to explore the world and the nature, but makes modern science and technology advance rapidly as well .To be short,the moon exploration activities facilitate both our life and work.

Do you agree with me? Looking forward to your different ideas and opinions.


第二节(20分)

假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据下面四幅图的先后顺序,写一篇英文周记,记述 你确定大学志愿的过程。

注意:词数不少于60

 One possible version:

The past week was by no means ordinary, for I had finally decided on my major.

This Monday, the topic was brought up again by my parents during dinner. I had asked myself the same question many times, but still couldn’t make up my mind. Seeing my hesitant look, mom patted me on my shoulder, her smile encouraging me to do more research.

Later that evening, I turned to the Internet for help. Faced with so many choices, I seemed to be lost. Law could be a good choice. Business and computer science were also attracting top students. I noted down one after another major, but crossed them all off, for what I wanted was a profession that could make a difference in people’s lives.

The inspiration came unexpectedly with the CCTV News yesterday. The moment “Role Models of Our Time” appeared on the screen, I was awed. The news story focused on superheroes without a cape – police officers, healthcare workers, delivery men, city cleaners—who guarded us and ensured our life ran normally. Suddenly, I realized my life’s purpose—relieving pain and saving lives. And to pursue this call, I decided to specialize in medical science.

I jumped excitedly at this idea. Mom and dad were also happy that I had found the compass for my future life, and said they would be so proud to see me in white. Now, determined to become a healthcare worker, whenever I start my schoolwork, I know I am studying for a noble cause.

(252 words)


邱老师版范文

    Last week,I spent the whole week to select my dream college major,which turned out to be a great success.

One day,while having dinner with my parents at home ,we had a pleasant discussion on my choices of college majors.They consistently expressed they would support me whatever major I chose.Their attitude provided me with more space and freedom.

Not knowing how to choose my ideal major,I surfed the Internet,where a wide range of majors were recommended,including language,literature,computer science,construction and so forth.Unfortunately,none of them met my demand, for what I really wanted to do was something that made greatest contributions to the people and the society.Only by doing so could I show my life value.Then on Friday evening,the main news on TV reporting the heroes who bravely fought against NOVID-19 at the front line inspired my final decision.I was convinced that learning medicine would help realize my dream.

Upon making my determination,I felt relieved and could not wait to share it with my parents.Hearing my noble ambition,they nodded with broad smiles,indicating their satisfaction and strong support.


在此感谢邱老师的江湖救急!如果哪位老师有这两篇的更好版本的写作,请看在这届高三生于非典考于新冠的特殊不容易上,发表到文后留言区。密切关注高考信息的家长们和高三英语教师们会陆续找到这里来的。先谢了!


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